silentviewing commented at 2016-06-29 19:41:57 » #1977854

The lack of parallelism between "panting" and "moans" seems super inappropriate, I hope this isn't a Language Arts classroom.

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Anonymous commented at 2016-06-30 00:30:50 » #1977949

Silentviewing, you've obviously never made a woman pant then...or maybe it's moan, either way very few language art classes critique lolicon.

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Anonymous commented at 2016-06-30 00:52:57 » #1977961

You're missing the point, anon -- he's not saying women can't pant and moan, he's criticising the odd juxtaposition of the declarative "moan" and gerund "panting." "Moaning" and "panting" (or "moan" and "pant") would be fine.

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JohnJonesJohnson commented at 2016-06-30 20:07:46 » #1978423

To sillentviewer and anon2, I'm sorry for my mistake, english is my second language. I'll be more careful about those details in the future.
Cheers!

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